假期— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I and my family spend'. Bạn nên nói 'My family and I spent'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh sử dụng từ 'uh' và nên thêm liên từ để câu văn tự nhiên hơn.

範例: My family and I spent two weeks visiting museums in my country during the last holiday, where many traditional values and historical events are showcased.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn, ví dụ 'relax and relieve' không chính xác, nên dùng 'relax and unwind' hoặc 'relax and relieve stress'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they give me a chance to relax and unwind, which helps me relieve stress after a busy year.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về ngày lễ công cộng yêu thích và giải thích rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên tránh lỗi như 'making makes' và dùng từ phù hợp hơn.

範例: My favorite public holiday is the beach holiday because I love swimming and being near the water. It makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn và tránh lặp từ. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, ví dụ thay vì 'go to everywhere to explore everything', bạn có thể nói 'travel to different places to explore new things'.

範例: During holidays, my family and I usually organize trips to different places to explore new things. It is always an interesting experience.

建議: Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'in at home' và sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có liên kết logic giữa các ý và tránh lặp từ.

範例: Since I am an introverted person, I prefer spending most of my time at home where I can relax and do what I enjoy, especially sleeping.

建議: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. 'Fresh and comfortable emotions' không tự nhiên, bạn có thể nói 'fresh air and a comfortable atmosphere'.

範例: I prefer a peaceful holiday because I can enjoy fresh air and a comfortable atmosphere.

建議: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc, ví dụ thay vì 'I want it is bustling', bạn có thể nói 'I like a bustling atmosphere'.

範例: If I could choose, I would prefer an exciting holiday because I enjoy a bustling atmosphere where I can dance and sing.

× In the last holiday, I and my family spend 2 weeks going to museums in my country where a lot of traditional values and historical uh events were held.

✓ In the last holiday, my family and I spent 2 weeks visiting museums in my country where many traditional values and historical events were preserved.

The phrase 'I and my family' should be 'my family and I' for correct word order. 'Spend' should be in past tense 'spent' to match the past time frame. 'Going to museums' is better expressed as 'visiting museums'. 'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate here. 'Were held' is incorrect because events are not held in museums; 'were preserved' fits better.

× Yes, I extremely enjoy holidays because it is a time I can relax and relieve. It can relieve my stress after a busy year.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy holidays because it is a time when I can relax and relieve stress. It helps me relieve my stress after a busy year.

'Extremely enjoy' is awkward; 'really enjoy' is more natural. 'Relax and relieve' is incomplete; 'relieve stress' is the correct phrase. 'It can relieve my stress' is better as 'It helps me relieve my stress' for clarity.

× I think it is beach because I like water and I want to swim. It's not only making makes me happier but also fits me.

✓ I think it is the beach because I like water and I want to swim. It not only makes me happier but also suits me.

'Beach' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Making makes' is redundant; 'makes' is correct. 'Fits me' is incorrect; 'suits me' is the proper expression.

× In holidays, I, my family and I organize a family trip and go to everywhere to explore everything that we want. It is interesting moment.

✓ During holidays, my family and I organize a family trip and go everywhere to explore everything we want. It is an interesting moment.

'In holidays' should be 'During holidays'. 'I, my family and I' is redundant; 'my family and I' is correct. 'Go to everywhere' is incorrect; 'go everywhere' is correct. 'Interesting moment' needs an article: 'an interesting moment'.

× Because I'm an introvert person so I like to spend most of my time in at home. I can do everything I want, especially sleeping.

✓ Because I'm an introverted person, I like to spend most of my time at home. I can do everything I want, especially sleep.

'Introvert person' should be 'introverted person'. 'In at home' is incorrect; 'at home' is correct. 'Especially sleeping' should be 'especially sleep' to match the verb form.

× I like a peaceful holiday. I can enjoy fresh and comfortable emotions.

✓ I like a peaceful holiday. I can enjoy fresh and comfortable feelings.

'Emotions' is not used with 'fresh and comfortable'; 'feelings' is more appropriate.

× If uh, if I can choose, I will choose exciting holiday because I want it is bustling and I can dance or sing a song.

✓ If I could choose, I would choose an exciting holiday because I want it to be bustling and I can dance or sing a song.

The conditional sentence requires 'If I could choose' and 'I would choose' for correct modal verb usage. 'Exciting holiday' needs an article 'an'. 'I want it is bustling' is incorrect; 'I want it to be bustling' is correct.