假期— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and clear. For example, say "I went to Chandigarh with my friends because we all like the city and enjoyed our time there."

範例: I went to Chandigarh with my friends last holiday because we all like the city. We had a great time exploring the parks and local markets.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by making it more natural and adding linking words. For example, "Yes, I really like holidays because they give me a chance to spend quality time with my family and loved ones."

範例: Yes, I really like holidays because they give me a chance to relax and spend quality time with my family and loved ones.

建議: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and adding linking words. For example, "My favourite public holiday is Diwali because I enjoy spending time with my family. We also visit Gurdwaras to attend special prayers."

範例: My favourite public holiday is Diwali because I enjoy celebrating with my family. We also visit Gurdwaras to attend special prayers and share sweets.

建議: Try to avoid repeating 'also' and keep sentences concise. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "On holidays, I usually cook with my mother, preparing dishes like Maggie, pasta, and pizza. Additionally, I enjoy reading books and spending time with my family."

範例: On holidays, I usually cook with my mother, making dishes like Maggie and pizza. Besides that, I enjoy reading books and spending quality time with my family.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words. For example, "Honestly, I don't like spending the whole day at home because my family members sometimes make a lot of noise, so I prefer to spend time outside."

範例: Honestly, I don't like spending the whole day at home because my family can be noisy. Therefore, I prefer to go outside and enjoy fresh air.

建議: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Use linking words for coherence. For example, "I prefer both types of holidays, but sometimes I enjoy a leisurely holiday because it allows me to spend more time with my loved ones. I also like going to the cinema with my friends."

範例: I enjoy both busy and leisurely holidays. However, I sometimes prefer leisurely holidays as I can spend quality time with my family and watch movies with my friends.

建議: Work on grammar and avoid repetition. Make your answer clear and concise. For example, "I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy every moment and spend quality time with my family."

範例: I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy every moment and get to spend quality time with my family.

× Firstly I decided to went to Chandigarh because we all liked Chandigarh very much and we really enjoyed there with many peoples.

✓ Firstly I decided to go to Chandigarh because we all liked Chandigarh very much and we really enjoyed there with many people.

The verb 'decided' is in past tense and should be followed by the base form 'go' not 'went'. Also, 'peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people'. Use 'go' after 'decided' because 'decide' is followed by the base verb form.

× we really enjoyed there with many peoples.

✓ we really enjoyed there with many people.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect in this context. 'People' is already plural and should be used instead of 'peoples' when referring to multiple persons.

× Yes, I really like holidays because on holidays it is the time to spend with your family members and loved ones.

✓ Yes, I really like holidays because holidays are the time to spend with your family members and loved ones.

The phrase 'on holidays it is the time' is awkward and incorrect. It is better to say 'holidays are the time' to express the idea clearly without unnecessary prepositions.

× On this occasion, I really enjoy with my family members and we also went to Gurdwara's to attend the meetings there.

✓ On this occasion, I really enjoy time with my family members and we also went to Gurdwaras to attend the meetings there.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed directly by the object without 'with'. Also, 'Gurdwara's' is incorrect; the plural form is 'Gurdwaras' without an apostrophe.

× we also went to Gurdwara's to attend the meetings there.

✓ we also went to Gurdwaras to attend the meetings there.

The apostrophe in 'Gurdwara's' incorrectly indicates possession. The correct plural form is 'Gurdwaras' without an apostrophe.

× On holidays I usually do cooking with my mother and I also prepare so many dishes like Maggie pasta, pizza and I also read books on holidays in my leisure time and I also like to spend times with my family members during holidays.

✓ On holidays I usually cook with my mother and I also prepare many dishes like Maggi pasta, pizza. I also read books during my leisure time and like to spend time with my family members during holidays.

The phrase 'do cooking' is incorrect; use 'cook' instead. 'So many' is informal; 'many' is better here. 'Maggi' is the correct spelling. 'Spend times' should be 'spend time' as 'time' is uncountable. Also, the sentence was too long and needed to be split for clarity.

× Honestly speaking, I don't like to spend my day at home because they because my family members are always irritating me by and disturbing me by a loud noise and I want to spend my time outside.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't like to spend my day at home because my family members are always irritating me and disturbing me with loud noise, and I want to spend my time outside.

The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and confusing here. The phrase 'irritating me by and disturbing me by a loud noise' is incorrect; use 'irritating me and disturbing me with loud noise' instead.

× Honestly speaking I prefer both, but sometimes I prefer leisurely holiday because on leisure time I can spend many time with my loved ones and I also go for a cinema for moving with my friends.

✓ Honestly speaking I prefer both, but sometimes I prefer a leisurely holiday because during leisure time I can spend much time with my loved ones and I also go to the cinema to watch movies with my friends.

Use 'a leisurely holiday' with the article 'a'. 'On leisure time' should be 'during leisure time'. 'Many time' is incorrect; use 'much time' for uncountable nouns. 'Go for a cinema for moving' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'go to the cinema to watch movies'.

× Honestly speaking, I prefer an exciting holidays because on exciting holidays I can enjoy every moment of the day and I spent many much time with my family members very exciting.

✓ Honestly speaking, I prefer an exciting holiday because on exciting holidays I can enjoy every moment of the day and I spend a lot of time with my family members very excitedly.

'An exciting holidays' is incorrect; 'holiday' should be singular after 'an'. 'Spent many much time' is incorrect; use 'spend a lot of time'. 'Very exciting' should be 'very excitedly' to modify the verb 'spend'. Also, 'spent' should be 'spend' to maintain present tense consistency.