假期— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat langsung dan hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, sebutkan tempat dan waktu secara tepat dan gunakan kata kerja yang benar.

範例: I went to Malaysia last February with my friends. We visited several interesting places there, such as Kuala Lumpur and Penang.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang jelas dan singkat tanpa pengulangan.

範例: Yes, I like holidays because they help me relax and recharge after working hard, reducing my stress.

建議: Gunakan nama hari besar yang benar dan jelas. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan antar ide.

範例: My favorite public holiday is Eid al-Fitr, a major Islamic celebration. During this time, I meet my old friends and enjoy a variety of delicious foods.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

範例: On holidays, I usually catch up with my friends, relax at home by browsing social media, read books, watch movies, or enjoy hobbies like baking, cycling, and running.

建議: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan tata bahasa agar lebih jelas dan alami. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang terhubung secara logis.

範例: Since I am an introvert, I prefer spending my days at home, even after working from 9 to 5 on weekdays. Therefore, I especially enjoy relaxing at home during weekends.

建議: Perjelas jawaban dengan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan tata bahasa yang benar. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan perbedaan preferensi secara jelas.

範例: It depends on the holiday. For Muslim holidays, I prefer busy ones because I enjoy catching up with friends and eating special food. For other holidays, I prefer to relax and take it easy.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat yang jelas dan koheren. Jelaskan preferensi dengan contoh yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide.

範例: My preference depends on the type of holiday. For major Muslim holidays, I prefer exciting celebrations, but for other holidays, I choose peaceful and relaxing ones.

× I went to Malaysia in Singapore in my last holiday in.

✓ I went to Malaysia and Singapore on my last holiday.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and preposition use. 'In my last holiday in' is incorrect; it should be 'on my last holiday'. Also, 'Malaysia in Singapore' is incorrect; it should be 'Malaysia and Singapore'. The past tense 'went' is correct.

× If not, if I'm not mistaken it happened February this year.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it happened in February this year.

The phrase 'If not' is unnecessary and confusing here. The preposition 'in' is missing before 'February'. The sentence should be in past tense and properly structured.

× I went there with my friends and we visit some place in there.

✓ I went there with my friends and we visited some places there.

The verb 'visit' should be in past tense 'visited' to match 'went'. 'Some place' should be plural 'some places' to indicate multiple locations. The preposition 'in' before 'there' is unnecessary.

× Yes, of course I like holidays because I think that holidays can make me more energized than before and it can my it can be my healing pills after I working hard this time and less stress.

✓ Yes, of course I like holidays because I think that holidays can make me more energized than before and they can be my healing pills after I work hard and feel less stressed.

The sentence has modal verb misuse and verb form errors. 'It can my it can be' is incorrect and redundant. 'I working hard' should be 'I work hard'. 'Less stress' should be 'feel less stressed' to be grammatically correct.

× My public holiday I like best is when a big day for Islam like in Israel victory or idol Atta.

✓ My favorite public holiday is a big day for Islam like Eid al-Fitr or Eid al-Adha.

The phrase 'My public holiday I like best' is awkward; 'My favorite public holiday' is better. 'In Israel victory or idol Atta' is incorrect; likely meant 'Eid al-Fitr or Eid al-Adha'. Proper nouns and terms should be used correctly.

× I can meet my old friends there and I can eat so many food.

✓ I can meet my old friends there and I can eat a lot of food.

'So many food' is incorrect because 'food' is uncountable; 'a lot of food' is correct. The present tense 'can meet' and 'can eat' are acceptable here.

× Sometimes I just catching up with my friends, sometimes I just relax in my house and scrawling some social media and sometimes I use my holiday to read a book or watch a movie or drink my some hobbies like baking, cycling, running or etcetera.

✓ Sometimes I just catch up with my friends, sometimes I just relax at home and scroll through social media, and sometimes I use my holiday to read a book, watch a movie, or do some hobbies like baking, cycling, running, etc.

'I just catching up' should be 'I just catch up' (simple present). 'Scrawling' is incorrect; should be 'scroll'. 'Drink my some hobbies' is incorrect; should be 'do some hobbies'. Prepositions and verb forms corrected.

× Sometimes I just relax in my house and scrawling some social media

✓ Sometimes I just relax at home and scroll through social media

The preposition 'in' is less natural than 'at' when referring to 'home'. 'Scrawling' is incorrect verb; 'scroll through' is the correct phrase for browsing social media.

× or drink my some hobbies like baking, cycling, running or etcetera.

✓ or do some hobbies like baking, cycling, running, etc.

'Drink my some hobbies' is incorrect; hobbies are activities, so the verb should be 'do'. 'My' is unnecessary here.

× Since I'm an introverted person so I like spend my day at home even if I work for 9:00 to 5:00 PM like every. Weekday, but I like at home more so I like the weekend too.

✓ Since I'm an introverted person, I like to spend my day at home even if I work from 9:00 to 5:00 PM every weekday, but I like being at home more, so I like the weekend too.

'I like spend' should be 'I like to spend'. 'Work for' should be 'work from'. 'Like every. Weekday' is fragmented; corrected to 'every weekday'. 'I like at home' should be 'I like being at home'.

× I work for 9:00 to 5:00 PM like every. Weekday

✓ I work from 9:00 to 5:00 PM every weekday

The preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'from' is used to indicate time range. The period after 'every' is incorrect and removed.

× Since I'm an introverted person so I like spend my day at home

✓ Since I'm an introverted person, I like to spend my day at home

Using both 'Since' and 'so' together is redundant. Use either 'Since' or 'so' to connect clauses, not both.

× I can eat so many food.

✓ I can eat a lot of food.

'Food' is an uncountable noun, so 'so many' is incorrect. Use 'a lot of' for uncountable nouns.

× I like to the busy one because I like to catch up with my friends, eating food, etcetera.

✓ I like the busy one because I like to catch up with my friends, eat food, etc.

'Like to the busy one' is incorrect; 'like the busy one' is correct. Also, parallel verb forms should be used: 'catch up' and 'eat'.

× It also depend the holiday the type of that holiday.

✓ It also depends on the type of holiday.

'Depend' should be 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Preposition 'on' is required after 'depends'.

× It also depend the holiday the type of that holiday.

✓ It also depends on the type of holiday.

The verb 'depend' requires the preposition 'on' to connect to its object.

× I prefer exciting holiday if it from big day for Muslim like it will fit 3 and it'll but I would like to choose peaceful holiday when it comes to another holiday like big day for my.

✓ I prefer an exciting holiday if it is a big day for Muslims, but I would like to choose a peaceful holiday when it comes to other holidays.

The sentence has unclear pronouns and missing articles. 'It from big day' should be 'it is a big day'. 'Big day for Muslim' should be 'big day for Muslims'. The phrase 'like it will fit 3 and it'll' is unclear and omitted for clarity.