礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. For example, say "I love giving gifts to my family and friends on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries because I believe gifts are a good gesture of love."

範例: I love giving gifts to my family and friends on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries because I believe gifts are a good gesture of love.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be specific about the types of gifts and recipients. For example, "I usually give gifts during birthday parties. For children, I choose small items like books and stationery, while for friends and family, I prefer watches or perfumes."

範例: I usually give gifts during birthday parties. For children, I choose small items like books and stationery, while for friends and family, I prefer watches or perfumes.

建議: Improve clarity by using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your points logically. For example, "When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's preferences and my budget. Sometimes I buy expensive gifts for special occasions, but if I don't know the person well, I choose something based on my own taste."

範例: When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's preferences and my budget. Sometimes I buy expensive gifts for special occasions, but if I don't know the person well, I choose something based on my own taste.

建議: Use correct tense and pronouns to improve clarity. Also, provide more specific details and link your ideas. For example, "Yes, I once gave a handmade gift of craft butterflies to my friend. He is passionate about unique artifacts, and she really appreciated my artwork."

範例: Yes, I once gave a handmade gift of craft butterflies to my friend. He is passionate about unique artifacts, and she really appreciated my artwork.

建議: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and using linking words. For example, "Not necessarily. I believe that the feelings behind a gift matter more than its price. If a gift is chosen with love and excitement, it expresses feelings better than an expensive one."

範例: Not necessarily. I believe that the feelings behind a gift matter more than its price. If a gift is chosen with love and excitement, it expresses feelings better than an expensive one.

× Yes, I'm very loved to be giving gift to my family members and friends and I give gift to on the special occasions like a birthday party on marriage anniversary.

✓ Yes, I really love giving gifts to my family members and friends, and I give gifts on special occasions like birthday parties and marriage anniversaries.

The phrase 'I'm very loved to be giving' is incorrect because 'love' as a verb should be followed by the gerund form 'giving' to express enjoyment of an activity. Also, 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' when referring to multiple presents. The preposition 'to on' is incorrect; it should be 'on' for occasions. Additionally, 'birthday party on marriage anniversary' should be pluralized and separated properly as 'birthday parties and marriage anniversaries'.

× Yes, I'm very loved to be giving gift to my family members and friends and I give gift to on the special occasions like a birthday party on marriage anniversary.

✓ Yes, I really love giving gifts to my family members and friends, and I give gifts on special occasions like birthday parties and marriage anniversaries.

The word 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' when referring to multiple presents. Also, 'birthday party' and 'marriage anniversary' should be pluralized to 'birthday parties' and 'marriage anniversaries' to indicate recurring events.

× Yes, I'm very loved to be giving gift to my family members and friends and I give gift to on the special occasions like a birthday party on marriage anniversary.

✓ Yes, I really love giving gifts to my family members and friends, and I give gifts on special occasions like birthday parties and marriage anniversaries.

The phrase 'give gift to on the special occasions' misuses prepositions. The correct preposition for occasions is 'on', so it should be 'give gifts on special occasions'. Also, 'to' is unnecessary before 'on'.

× Birthday party I give the gift to the children. Just small book and pen, pencil or my friend and other family members like watch and expensive perfume.

✓ On birthday parties, I give gifts to children, such as small books, pens, pencils, or to my friends and other family members, like watches and expensive perfumes.

'Birthday party' should be pluralized to 'birthday parties' to indicate general occasions. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' when giving multiple presents. Items like 'book', 'pen', 'pencil', 'watch', and 'perfume' should be pluralized when referring to multiple items. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Birthday party I give the gift to the children. Just small book and pen, pencil or my friend and other family members like watch and expensive perfume.

✓ On birthday parties, I give gifts to children, such as small books, pens, pencils, or to my friends and other family members, like watches and expensive perfumes.

The phrase 'Birthday party I give the gift to the children' lacks the preposition 'on' to indicate the time of giving gifts. It should be 'On birthday parties, I give gifts to children.' Also, 'to' is needed before 'my friends and other family members' for clarity.

× Just small book and pen, pencil or my friend and other family members like watch and expensive perfume.

✓ I give small books, pens, and pencils to children, and to my friends and other family members, I give watches and expensive perfumes.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunctions to connect items and recipients clearly. Using 'and' and 'to' appropriately clarifies the meaning and improves sentence flow.

× When I want to buy gift for my family and friends, I consider the choices and prize money because sometimes I need to be by some expensive quote for the specialty and on the other side if I don't know person that time I choose that gift according to my choice.

✓ When I want to buy gifts for my family and friends, I consider their preferences and the price because sometimes I need to buy some expensive items for special occasions, and if I don't know the person, I choose the gift according to my own preference.

The preposition 'for' is correct with 'buy gifts for'. 'Prize money' is incorrect; it should be 'price'. The phrase 'need to be by some expensive quote' is incorrect; it should be 'need to buy some expensive items'. 'On the other side' is better replaced with 'and'. 'If I don't know person' needs the article 'the' before 'person'. 'According to my choice' is better expressed as 'according to my own preference'.

× When I want to buy gift for my family and friends, I consider the choices and prize money because sometimes I need to be by some expensive quote for the specialty and on the other side if I don't know person that time I choose that gift according to my choice.

✓ When I want to buy gifts for my family and friends, I consider their preferences and the price because sometimes I need to buy some expensive items for special occasions, and if I don't know the person, I choose the gift according to my own preference.

'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' when referring to multiple presents. 'Choices' is acceptable but 'preferences' is clearer. 'Quote' should be 'items' or 'products' in this context.

× Yes, I really remember once a time when I give a handmade gift.

✓ Yes, I really remember one time when I gave a handmade gift.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' to match the past time reference 'once a time' (corrected to 'one time').

× Yes, I really remember once a time when I give a handmade gift.

✓ Yes, I really remember one time when I gave a handmade gift.

The phrase 'once a time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'one time' or 'once'.

× It was the gift of handmade craft butterflies.

✓ It was a gift of handmade craft butterflies.

The article 'the' is too specific here; 'a gift' is more appropriate. The phrase 'handmade craft butterflies' is acceptable if referring to multiple butterflies.

× I give it to my friend, he's always passionate about the some artifact gifts and she loves my artwork.

✓ I gave it to my friend; he's always passionate about some artifact gifts, and she loves my artwork.

The verb 'give' should be in past tense 'gave' to match the past event. Also, 'the some' is incorrect; it should be 'some'. The pronouns 'he' and 'she' are inconsistent and unclear; assuming the friend is female, 'she' should be used consistently.

× I give it to my friend, he's always passionate about the some artifact gifts and she loves my artwork.

✓ I gave it to my friend; she is always passionate about some artifact gifts, and she loves my artwork.

The pronouns 'he' and 'she' refer to the same person and should be consistent. Also, 'the some' is incorrect; 'some' alone is correct.

× Not necessarily. I believe that expensive gifts don't express the feelings because if we buy the gift with the excitement and love, we can show our feelings more than the expensive gift.

✓ Not necessarily. I believe that expensive gifts don't express feelings because if we buy a gift with excitement and love, we can show our feelings more than with an expensive gift.

The modal verb usage is acceptable, but the sentence is improved by removing 'the' before 'feelings' and 'gift' when used generally. Also, 'the excitement and love' is better as 'excitement and love' without 'the'. The phrase 'more than the expensive gift' is better as 'more than with an expensive gift' for clarity.