历史— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ естественный и достаточно полный, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразие лексики, а также сделать предложения более краткими и точными.

範例: Yes, I have studied history and really enjoyed it. I am particularly interested in ancient history because it helps me understand how my ancestors lived. I often read books about historical events to learn how they shaped the modern world.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, что снижает его понятность. Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции, а также связующие слова для логичности.

範例: I usually learn history by watching historical films, which show how events happened in the past. I also prefer listening to stories rather than reading, but sometimes I read books about our ancestors to understand their lives better.

建議: Ответ слишком короткий и содержит повторы. Следует давать более развернутые и конкретные объяснения, избегать лишних слов и использовать связки.

範例: One benefit of learning history is that it helps us understand who our ancestors were. Additionally, it allows us to appreciate our culture and learn from past experiences.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более ясные выражения, а также связующие слова для логичности.

範例: I believe learning history is very important because in the past, many people, including our parents, did not know much about Kazakh history. Therefore, it is essential for us to learn and understand our heritage.

× The one thing that I do is watching films about history, how is going on, how it was in the past.

✓ The one thing that I do is watch films about history, how it is going on, and how it was in the past.

After the verb 'do' in this structure, the base form of the verb should be used, not the -ing form. Therefore, 'watching' should be corrected to 'watch'. Also, 'how is going on' should be 'how it is going on' to be grammatically correct.

× And I'm that person who also prefer to listen, not to reading, but sometimes I'm reading and learn about our ancestors to know how it's going to generate.

✓ And I'm that person who also prefers to listen, not to read, but sometimes I read and learn about our ancestors to know how it's going to develop.

The verb 'prefer' must agree with the third person singular subject 'person', so it should be 'prefers'. The phrase 'not to reading' is incorrect; the correct form is 'not to read'. Also, 'sometimes I'm reading' is better as 'sometimes I read' to maintain tense consistency. 'How it's going to generate' is unclear; 'how it's going to develop' is more appropriate.

× Uh, the one benefit is you should know your history because you should know who's who's your ancestors.

✓ Uh, one benefit is that you should know your history because you should know who your ancestors are.

The phrase 'who's who's your ancestors' is incorrect. It should be 'who your ancestors are' to correctly form the relative clause. Also, 'the one benefit' is better as 'one benefit' for natural expression.

× And also I'm kinda interested in a history.

✓ And also I'm kinda interested in history.

The noun 'history' is uncountable here and does not require the indefinite article 'a'. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I think that is really vital for us because when we was in the SSL, we, our mothers and our parents didn't know how was our history about Kazakhs.

✓ I think that is really vital for us because when we were in the SSL, we, our mothers, and our parents didn't know what our history about Kazakhs was.

The verb 'was' should be 'were' to agree with the plural subject 'we'. Also, the indirect question 'how was our history' should be 'what our history was' for correct word order in reported speech.