金钱— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more fluent and clear by reducing hesitations and filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. For example, explain why you borrow money from your mother and how you repay her. This will make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my mother several times because I needed financial help. She always supports me, and I promise to repay her as soon as I can. Therefore, I work hard to earn money and return what I owe her.

建議: Focus on speaking more clearly and avoid repeating filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words such as 'when' and 'because' to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, say 'friends or relatives' instead of 'alternatives'. This will improve the naturalness and clarity of your answer.

範例: Yes, I sometimes lend money to my friends or relatives when they need help because I want to assist them. I feel happy when I can support them financially.

× actually when I need the money in any time, just my mother, uh, assess me and give me what I need.

✓ actually when I need money at any time, my mother just asks me and gives me what I need.

The modal verb 'need' is used correctly, but the sentence has issues with word choice and prepositions. 'In any time' should be 'at any time' (preposition error, ID 11). Also, 'assess me' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'asks me'. The modal verb usage is acceptable, but the sentence needs correction for clarity and proper preposition use.

× I promised her that I will give this money for, for her after that and I then I work hard to.

✓ I promised her that I would give her the money after that, and then I worked hard too.

The sentence mixes past and future tenses incorrectly. After 'promised' (past tense), the future tense 'will' should be changed to 'would' to maintain tense consistency (Past tense issue, ID 5). Also, 'work' should be in past tense 'worked' to match the past context. 'For her' is redundant after 'give this money'; 'give her the money' is correct.

× Yes, sometimes when I am uh, find anyone, uh, from my friends or my uh, alternatives need money, I lend them uh, what they need, uh, uh, to assist him, uh, and, and uh, make a make him be delighted.

✓ Yes, sometimes when I find someone from my friends or acquaintances who needs money, I lend them what they need to assist them and make them happy.

The phrase 'I am find anyone' is incorrect; 'find' should be in present simple tense 'find' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'Alternatives' is incorrect; 'acquaintances' or 'others' is better. 'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular 'who' (Subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Assist him' and 'make him be delighted' should be 'assist them' and 'make them happy' for pronoun agreement and natural expression (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12; Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, ID 13).