金钱— Part 1 評分報告

× Yes, I have a board of money just once when I was 22 years old.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money just once when I was 22 years old.

The verb 'have a board' is incorrect in this context. The correct past tense verb is 'borrowed' to indicate the action of taking money temporarily in the past.

× So I ordered my sister to borrow me ¥1 million.

✓ So I asked my sister to lend me ¥1 million.

The verb 'ordered' is too strong and inappropriate here; 'asked' is more suitable. Also, 'borrow me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lend me' because the sister is giving money to the speaker.

× No, I will never rent money to others because my parents are always advised me not to lend my precious money to others and that advice was helpful because it can cause many troubles.

✓ No, I will never lend money to others because my parents have always advised me not to lend my precious money to others, and that advice has been helpful because it can cause many troubles.

The modal verb 'will' is acceptable here for future intention. However, 'rent money' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'lend money'. Also, 'are always advised me' is incorrect; it should be 'have always advised me' to indicate a repeated past action with present relevance. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and correcting verb tenses.