聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + lý do ngắn gọn), sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, therefore). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (a introvert → an introverted person) và các câu chưa hoàn chỉnh. Giữ tối đa 4–5 câu.

範例: No, I don't like parties because I'm an introverted person and prefer quiet time. For example, I enjoy staying at home and watching Netflix to relax. So I usually decline large social events and spend weekends reading or watching shows.

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng về tần suất và tránh cụm từ không phù hợp như “As you recall”. Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề nêu tần suất (e.g., I often attended...), sau đó giải thích lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh các câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và lỗi thì (make give by myself không rõ nghĩa).

範例: When I was a child, I often attended birthday parties, maybe once or twice a month. My friends invited me frequently, and we usually played games and ate cake together. I remember enjoying those gatherings because they were fun and lively.

建議: Câu trả lời nên nêu rõ kinh nghiệm cá nhân: bạn đã từng tổ chức hay không. Nếu không, nói rõ là bố mẹ tổ chức và mô tả ngắn gọn về cảm xúc/hoạt động. Dùng câu ngắn, tránh câu dài lủng củng; sửa ngữ pháp (when we together → when we are together).

範例: I haven't organized a big party myself; my parents usually plan my birthday celebrations. They invite many of my friends, and I feel very happy because I can relax and spend time with both friends and family when we're together.

× No, I don't like parties because I am a introvert person so I enjoy staying at home to watch Netflix alone.

✓ No, I don't like parties because I am an introvert, so I enjoy staying at home watching Netflix alone.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound (article error). Remove redundant noun 'person' after 'introvert' and use a comma before 'so' to join clauses; use 'watching' (verb + -ing) to express an activity you enjoy. Suggestion: Say 'I am an introvert' and use 'watching Netflix' for natural phrasing.

× Moreover, I can. Sitting to relax and.

✓ Moreover, I can sit and relax.

Original has fragmented sentence fragments and incorrect punctuation (sentence structure error). Combine into a single clause with correct verb form: 'can sit' followed by base verb 'relax'. Suggestion: Use complete sentences: 'I can sit and relax.'

× As you recall, when I was a kid, I usually went to birthday parties because my friends often invite me.

✓ As you recall, when I was a kid, I usually went to birthday parties because my friends often invited me.

Tense inconsistency: 'was' and 'went' are past, so 'invite' should be past tense 'invited'. Keep past tense throughout to describe past habits. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past time frames.

× Moreover, I make give by myself, so my friends really.

✓ Moreover, I used to give parties myself, so my friends really enjoyed them.

Original is ungrammatical: 'make give by myself' is incorrect verb collocation and structure (sentence structure and verb form). 'Used to give' indicates habitual past action; 'enjoyed them' completes the thought. Suggestion: Use 'used to give parties myself' and complete the clause with what friends felt.

× Just my parents often organize my birthday party for me and they invite a lot of my friends that make me feel very happy and I can relax with my friends and my family when we together.

✓ Usually my parents organize my birthday party for me and they invite many of my friends, which makes me very happy and allows me to relax with my friends and family when we are together.

Multiple issues: adverb choice 'just' -> 'usually' for frequency (incorrect use of adverbs), 'a lot of my friends' -> 'many of my friends' (quantifier), 'that make' should be 'which makes' to refer to the whole clause, subject-verb agreement and verb tense: 'make' -> 'makes'; missing verb 'are' in 'when we are together'. Also 'allows me to relax' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'usually', 'many of my friends', 'which makes me', and include 'are' in 'when we are together'.