聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid repetition.

範例: I don’t really enjoy parties. However, I do like socialising in small groups because I prefer quiet conversations, for example visiting a new café or restaurant with close friends. This makes me feel relaxed rather than anxious.

建議: Answer directly about frequency (e.g., never or rarely), then explain with clear reasons and one specific example. Use past tense consistently and correct grammar (e.g., 'made me anxious'). Limit to two or three sentences.

範例: I rarely attended parties as a child. Because I was quite introverted, I preferred staying at home, and large family gatherings made me feel anxious, so I usually spent holidays quietly with my parents.

建議: Begin with a clear yes/no and brief description. Use past tense and correct word order. Provide one or two specific details about the party (where, who, why) and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I once organized a small birthday party for my brother at our house. Since it was at home and we invited only close friends and family, I felt comfortable and everyone enjoyed a relaxed evening.

× I like to go and explore new place, new cafe, new restaurant with my loved ones and friends.

✓ I like to go and explore new places, new cafes, new restaurants with my loved ones and friends.

The nouns place, cafe, and restaurant refer to countable items in general and should be in plural form when listing examples of things you like to explore. Use plural to match the general meaning and parallel structure: 'new places, new cafes, new restaurants.'

× It's make me feel more.

✓ It makes me feel more comfortable.

The subject it requires the third-person singular verb form makes. Also the original sentence is incomplete and vague; adding 'comfortable' clarifies the meaning. Use 'it makes' for subject-verb agreement and complete the phrase.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

When asking about frequency in the past, use the plural 'parties' to indicate repeated events. The auxiliary did is correct for past tense; only the noun needs pluralization for natural phrasing.

× When I was a child I didn't go for party because I'm a, say, introverted kind person, so I prefer to stay home rather than go parties and talking with, uh, relatives.

✓ When I was a child I didn't go to parties because I was, say, an introverted person, so I preferred to stay home rather than go to parties and talk with relatives.

Several issues: 'go for party' is incorrect preposition and article use; use 'go to parties.' The tense should be past ('I was', 'I preferred') to match 'When I was a child.' 'An introverted person' needs the indefinite article and simpler adjective order. Use the base form 'talk' after 'rather than' to keep parallel structure. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant words.

× It's make me in anxiety, that's why.

✓ It made me anxious; that's why.

Use past tense 'made' to match the context 'When I was a child.' Also English uses the adjective 'anxious' rather than the noun phrase 'in anxiety.' The revised sentence is more natural and grammatically correct.

× Is a hub organize a party for my brother birthday.

✓ I helped organize a party for my brother's birthday.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing subject. Use a clear subject 'I' and correct verb phrase 'helped organize' or 'organized.' Also possessive 'brother's birthday' is required. The corrected version conveys the intended meaning with proper structure.

× Uh, it's party organized in my own house.

✓ The party was organized in my own house.

Use past tense passive 'was organized' to describe an event that happened in the past. Include the article 'the' before 'party' for specificity, and maintain past tense to match the narrative.

× That's why it's make me feel more comfortable.

✓ That's why it made me feel more comfortable.

Maintain past tense 'made' to agree with the rest of the past narrative. 'It made me feel more comfortable' correctly matches subject-verb agreement and tense.

× And also it's a one house, so we only invite our close friends, uh, and we enjoy.

✓ Also it was just one house, so we only invited our close friends and enjoyed ourselves.

'A one house' is ungrammatical; use 'just one house' or 'only one house.' Match past tense with 'was' and 'invited.' 'Enjoy' should be 'enjoyed ourselves' to be natural and complete. Remove filler 'uh.'