交通— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa eigo no shizen-sa to seikaku-sa o takameru tame ni, 'uh' nado no filler o sakete kudasai. Mata, 'a little traffic' wa 'little traffic' to shite tsukawarete imasu ga, 'little' wa hitei-teki na imi mo motsu node, 'not much traffic' nado no hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu. Soshite, 'yet still' wa futatsu no imi ga nite iru node, doretomo hitotsu dake tsukau koto o osusume shimasu. Kongo wa, motto shizen de, kankyou ni yoku atte iru kotoba o tsukatte, kotae o kanzen ni shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I live in a suburban area where there is not much traffic. However, there are many crosswalks to ensure pedestrian safety in our town.

建議: Kotae no naka de, 'pedestrian' wa fukusuukei no toki wa 'pedestrians' to shite tsukau koto ga hitsuyou desu. Mata, 'child children' to iu fukusei wa fuhou desu. 'Children' dake de jyuubun desu. Soshite, kotae wa motto seikaku ni, rikai shi yasui you ni, rensetsu-go o tsukatte setsumei shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'because' ya 'which makes it' nado o tsukatte, riyuu o tsukeru to yoi desu.

範例: There is a winding road in my town which is very dangerous for pedestrians, especially children, because it is hard to see oncoming cars.

× Yes, uh, I'm living in the suburban area and although there is a little traffic yet still we have many crosswalks to ensure pedestrian safety in our town.

✓ Yes, uh, I live in the suburban area and although there is little traffic, we still have many crosswalks to ensure pedestrian safety in our town.

The use of 'I'm living' is incorrect here because the sentence describes a habitual or general fact, which requires the simple present tense 'I live'. Also, 'a little traffic' should be 'little traffic' to correctly express a small amount in a negative context. The word 'yet' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow; 'we still have' is sufficient. To improve, use simple present tense for habitual actions and avoid redundant words.

× Well, there is a road in my town which is very winding and it's very dangerous for pedestrian, especially for those child children.

✓ Well, there is a road in my town which is very winding and it's very dangerous for pedestrians, especially for those children.

The word 'pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians' because it refers to people in general. Also, 'child children' is redundant and incorrect; the correct plural form is 'children'. To improve, ensure that countable nouns referring to multiple people or things are in plural form and avoid redundant expressions.