Part 1
考官
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the placewhere you live?
考生
Yes, there are many crosswalk around my neighborhood since there is a primary school near my home, so they need some crosswalk to keep the students safe. However, this this this cross is quite busy in the morning and.
考官
Is there anything you would like to change aboutthe traffic in your area?
考生
Yes, since there is a primary school near my home, the traffic around my neighborhood is quite busy and especially in the morning and afternoon when students go and from the school there are many traffic jams.
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the place where you live?
分數: 65.0建議: 回答中存在语法错误和重复词汇,且句子结构不够完整,表达不够自然。建议注意单复数形式,避免重复词汇,并且补充完整句子,使表达更流畅。
範例: Yes, there are many crosswalks around my neighborhood because there is a primary school nearby. They are necessary to keep the students safe. However, these crosswalks tend to be very busy in the mornings.
Is there anything you would like to change about the traffic in your area?
分數: 70.0建議: 回答内容较为完整,但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词,表达略显重复。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯,并避免重复表达。
範例: Yes, I would like to improve the traffic situation because the area around my neighborhood is very busy, especially in the mornings and afternoons when students go to and from school, which often causes traffic jams.
× Yes, there are many crosswalk around my neighborhood since there is a primary school near my home, so they need some crosswalk to keep the students safe.
✓ Yes, there are many crosswalks around my neighborhood since there is a primary school near my home, so they need some crosswalks to keep the students safe.
“crosswalk”是可数名词,表示“人行横道”,当数量大于1时应使用复数形式“crosswalks”。句中“many crosswalk”应改为“many crosswalks”,同理“some crosswalk”应改为“some crosswalks”。
× However, this this this cross is quite busy in the morning and.
✓ However, this crosswalk is quite busy in the morning.
句子中重复了“this”三次,且句尾“and”后无内容,导致句子结构不完整。应删除多余的“this”,并去掉无意义的“and”,使句子完整通顺。
× Yes, since there is a primary school near my home, the traffic around my neighborhood is quite busy and especially in the morning and afternoon when students go and from the school there are many traffic jams.
✓ Yes, since there is a primary school near my home, the traffic around my neighborhood is quite busy, especially in the morning and afternoon when students go to and from the school. There are many traffic jams.
短语“go and from the school”中缺少介词“to”,正确表达应为“go to and from the school”。此外,句子较长且结构混乱,应适当断句,使表达更清晰。