Part 1
考官
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the placewhere you live?
考生
Yes, there are many courseworks around my cities because everyone are very traffic and they are very busy, so they don't have time to leave the road for another people. So crosswalks next to the traffic attention makes people cross easily.
考官
Is there anything you would like to change aboutthe traffic in your area?
考生
Well, I like to change the traffic jam in my area, not just in Tomahawk but in also in Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh City, which are very busy and have many traffic times, especially in a rush time, about 5:00 to 7:00. It's very inconvenient and make me feel very anxious.
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the place where you live?
分數: 45.0建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần cải thiện về ngữ pháp, từ vựng và sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'crosswalks' thay vì 'courseworks'), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'everyone are' nên là 'everyone is', và trình bày ý rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ có liên kết logic.
範例: Yes, there are many crosswalks in my city because traffic is usually heavy. People are often busy and in a hurry, so having crosswalks near busy intersections helps pedestrians cross the road safely and easily.
Is there anything you would like to change about the traffic in your area?
分數: 55.0建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, 'I like to change the traffic jam' nên là 'I would like to reduce the traffic jams'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết bằng từ nối phù hợp. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú và chính xác hơn.
範例: I would like to reduce the traffic jams in my area, especially during rush hours from 5 to 7 pm. Cities like Tomahawk, Hanoi, and Ho Chi Minh City are very busy at these times, which makes traveling inconvenient and stressful for me.
× Yes, there are many courseworks around my cities because everyone are very traffic and they are very busy, so they don't have time to leave the road for another people.
✓ Yes, there are many crosswalks around my city because everyone is very busy with traffic, so they don't have time to leave the road for other people.
The word 'courseworks' is incorrect; the correct word is 'crosswalks' which is plural. 'Cities' should be singular 'city' if referring to one place. 'Everyone' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. 'Traffic' is uncountable and should not be used as an adjective here; 'busy with traffic' is correct. 'Another people' is incorrect; 'other people' is the correct phrase.
× everyone are very traffic and they are very busy
✓ everyone is very busy with traffic
'Everyone' is a singular indefinite pronoun and requires a singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'very traffic' is incorrect; 'busy with traffic' is the correct expression.
× So crosswalks next to the traffic attention makes people cross easily.
✓ So crosswalks next to traffic signals help people cross easily.
'Traffic attention' is not a correct phrase; 'traffic signals' or 'traffic lights' is appropriate. Also, 'makes' should agree with the plural subject 'crosswalks', so 'make' is correct. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.
× Well, I like to change the traffic jam in my area, not just in Tomahawk but in also in Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh City, which are very busy and have many traffic times, especially in a rush time, about 5:00 to 7:00.
✓ Well, I would like to change the traffic jams in my area, not just in Tomahawk but also in Hanoi and Ho Chi Minh City, which are very busy and have heavy traffic, especially during rush hours from about 5:00 to 7:00.
'Traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' to match the context. 'In also in' is incorrect; 'also in' is correct. 'Have many traffic times' is incorrect; 'have heavy traffic' or 'experience heavy traffic' is appropriate. 'A rush time' should be 'rush hours'.
× It's very inconvenient and make me feel very anxious.
✓ It's very inconvenient and makes me feel very anxious.
'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. The verb should be in the third person singular present tense.