Part 1
考官
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the placewhere you live?
考生
Yes there are, currently I'm leaving Melbourne and the area live is close to the CBD, so the traffic is very busy in here and many passenger passes by in here. So they actually there are many crosswalk.
考官
Is there anything you would like to change aboutthe traffic in your area?
考生
If it possible, I hope the city councillor can have more public transport in my area. Uh since the major way I go out is by bus. So if it possible I can hope that they can add more trend lines or in here.
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the place where you live?
分數: 60.0建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,建议注意时态和介词的正确使用,同时避免重复表达。可以简洁明了地描述地点和交通状况,提升语言的流畅性和准确性。
範例: Yes, there are many crosswalks around where I live. I currently live in Melbourne, near the CBD, so the traffic is quite busy and many pedestrians use the crosswalks every day.
Is there anything you would like to change about the traffic in your area?
分數: 55.0建議: 回答中语法和表达不够准确,且内容不够具体。建议明确表达希望增加公共交通的具体方式,并使用连词使句子更连贯。
範例: If possible, I would like the city council to increase public transport options in my area. Since I usually travel by bus, adding more bus routes or train lines would make commuting much easier.
× currently I'm leaving Melbourne and the area live is close to the CBD
✓ currently I live in Melbourne and the area I live in is close to the CBD
这里使用了“I'm leaving”,表示正在离开,时态错误。应使用一般现在时“live”表示居住状态。
× the area live is close to the CBD
✓ the area I live in is close to the CBD
缺少介词“in”,正确表达应为“the area I live in”,表示“我居住的地区”。
× the traffic is very busy in here and many passenger passes by in here
✓ the traffic is very busy here and many passengers pass by here
“in here”用法不当,通常用“here”表示“这里”;“passenger”应为复数“passengers”,且动词应与复数主语一致。
× many passenger passes by in here
✓ many passengers pass by here
“passenger”应为复数形式“passengers”,动词“passes”应改为“pass”以符合复数主语。
× So they actually there are many crosswalk
✓ So actually there are many crosswalks
“crosswalk”应为复数形式“crosswalks”,因为前面用了“many”。
× If it possible, I hope the city councillor can have more public transport in my area
✓ If it is possible, I hope the city councillor can provide more public transport in my area
缺少动词“is”使句子不完整,且“have”用法不当,应改为“provide”更合适。
× the major way I go out is by bus
✓ the main way I go out is by bus
“major way”用法不自然,通常用“main way”表示主要方式。
× So if it possible I can hope that they can add more trend lines or in here
✓ So if it is possible, I hope that they can add more train lines here
缺少“is”,且“can hope”用法不当,直接用“hope”即可;“trend lines”应为“train lines”;“or in here”不合适,改为“here”。