购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm like a girl' hoặc 'whenever I exhausted'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng của bạn.

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax when I'm bored or tired. It also motivates me and makes me happy since I can buy things I like.

建議: Bạn nên cải thiện cấu trúc câu để tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp như 'it need to be have'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn để diễn đạt ý kiến của bạn.

範例: Yes, I always compare prices because I have a limited budget. I want to make sure the items are affordable but also of good quality, so I feel satisfied with what I pay for.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ như 'make list' nên là 'make a list' và 'family Ness' có thể là 'family needs'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Not really. Before shopping, I usually make a list based on my needs and my family's needs. Also, I carefully consider my budget to avoid buying unnecessary items.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên như 'the more better'. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Hãy giải thích rõ ràng hơn về lý do bạn nghĩ sản phẩm đắt tiền thường tốt hơn.

範例: I strongly agree because expensive products usually have better quality. Companies invest more in making high-quality items when they charge higher prices.

× I'm like a girl who always goes shopping whenever I feel bored or just whenever I exhausted because these things can make me forget about the daily green and make me have more motivations for my life.

✓ I am like a girl who always goes shopping whenever I feel bored or just whenever I am exhausted because these things can make me forget about the daily grind and give me more motivation in my life.

The pronoun 'I' requires the verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'I am exhausted'. Also, 'daily green' is a mishearing or typo for 'daily grind'. 'Make me have more motivations' is awkward; 'give me more motivation' is more natural. Correct pronoun and verb forms improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Not only that, shopping like the things that make me more happy or because of I can buy anything I want.

✓ Not only that, shopping is something that makes me happier because I can buy anything I want.

The phrase 'shopping like the things that make me more happy or because of I can buy anything I want' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Shopping is something that makes me happier' is correct. 'Because of I can buy' should be 'because I can buy'. Also, 'more happy' should be 'happier' (comparative adjective). The conjunction and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.

× So if I need to buy the items that have to be affordable and but with the condition that it need to be have the adequate quality which make me feel like it's suitable for me and it's suitable for the cost that I paid.

✓ So if I need to buy items, they have to be affordable but with the condition that they have adequate quality which makes me feel like they are suitable for me and suitable for the cost that I pay.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'items that have' is correct, but 'it need to be have' should be 'they have'. Also, 'which make' should be 'which makes' to agree with 'quality' (singular). 'Cost that I paid' should be 'cost that I pay' to maintain present tense consistency. Correct subject-verb agreement and plural forms improve grammatical accuracy.

× Not really, because before going shopping I usually make list of things that I need this list with based on my own demands as well as my family Ness.

✓ Not really, because before going shopping I usually make a list of things that I need. This list is based on my own demands as well as my family's needs.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks articles. 'Make list' should be 'make a list'. 'This list with based on' is incorrect; it should be 'This list is based on'. 'Family Ness' is a mishearing or typo for 'family's needs'. Proper sentence separation and article usage improve clarity and correctness.

× I also consider my budget carefully to avoid spending too much money on the unnecessary items.

✓ I also consider my budget carefully to avoid spending too much money on unnecessary items.

The article 'the' before 'unnecessary items' is unnecessary unless referring to specific items already mentioned. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct when speaking generally.

× I strongly agree with this. I do. I also lean toward the expensive products because I think that the quality would be suitable or accurate with the cost that is good.

✓ I strongly agree with this. I do. I also lean toward expensive products because I think that the quality would be suitable or appropriate for the cost.

'The expensive products' is too specific; 'expensive products' is more general. 'Accurate with the cost that is good' is awkward; 'appropriate for the cost' is clearer. Pronoun and article usage is corrected for naturalness and clarity.

× Like with the costly and high budget the company would produce the more better.

✓ With a high budget, the company would produce better products.

'The more better' is incorrect; 'better' is the comparative form and does not need 'more'. 'Costly and high budget' is awkward; 'a high budget' is clearer. The sentence is restructured for grammatical correctness and clarity.