购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'Dre fashion knowledge.'

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it allows me to learn about different fashion styles, and it makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has many filler words. Start with a clear statement and then explain your reason with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I come from a middle-class family and have a limited budget, so I want to make sure I get the best value for my money.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct answer and explain why with specific reasons. Avoid unrelated information and ensure your sentences are complete.

範例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices when shopping because I am often busy and don't have much time to decide carefully.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

範例: I believe that expensive products are usually better than cheaper ones because they tend to be made with higher quality materials and last longer.

× Because it gives me various type of Dre fashion knowledge and it makes me very happy when I'm shopping.

✓ Because it gives me various types of Dre fashion knowledge and it makes me very happy when I'm shopping.

The word 'type' should be plural 'types' because 'various' indicates more than one type. Using the plural form agrees with the quantifier 'various'.

× Because it gives me various type of Dre fashion knowledge and it makes me very happy when I'm shopping.

✓ Because it gives me various types of Dre fashion knowledge and it makes me very happy when I'm shopping.

The quantifier 'various' requires a plural noun following it. Therefore, 'type' should be changed to 'types' to correctly match the quantifier.

× Right when I was shopping because I was born in a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget of so shopping, uh, so I compared a price, uh, when I'm shopping.

✓ Right when I was shopping because I was born into a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget for shopping, uh, so I compared prices, uh, when I was shopping.

The preposition 'in' should be 'into' when referring to being born into a social class. Also, 'budget of so shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'budget for shopping'. Additionally, 'compared a price' should be 'compared prices' to reflect plural and correct usage. The tense in the last clause should be consistent past tense 'when I was shopping'.

× Right when I was shopping because I was born in a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget of so shopping, uh, so I compared a price, uh, when I'm shopping.

✓ Right when I was shopping because I was born into a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget for shopping, uh, so I compared prices, uh, when I was shopping.

The phrase 'a price' should be plural 'prices' because people usually compare multiple prices when shopping, not just one.

× Right when I was shopping because I was born in a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget of so shopping, uh, so I compared a price, uh, when I'm shopping.

✓ Right when I was shopping because I was born into a middle class family, uh, I have a low budget for shopping, uh, so I compared prices, uh, when I was shopping.

The phrase 'when I'm shopping' mixes present tense with past context. It should be 'when I was shopping' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I was in shop because I am a very busy person I love.

✓ I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I am in a shop because I am a very busy person I love.

The phrase 'when I was in shop' is incorrect because the question is about a general situation, so present tense 'when I am in a shop' is appropriate. Also, 'in shop' should be 'in a shop' to include the article. The sentence ends abruptly with 'I love' which is incomplete and unclear.

× I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I was in shop because I am a very busy person I love.

✓ I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I am in a shop because I am a very busy person I love.

The noun 'shop' requires an article 'a' to be grammatically correct in this context.

× I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I was in shop because I am a very busy person I love.

✓ I think it is very difficult for me to choose when I am in a shop because I am a very busy person and I love shopping.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'and I love shopping' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Yes, I think expensive products are always better than cheap cheaper ones because it uh gives uh you VE very quality products, uh expensive products and uh very.

✓ Yes, I think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because they give you very high quality products, expensive products, and more.

The phrase 'cheap cheaper ones' is redundant; 'cheaper ones' suffices. Also, 'it gives you' should be 'they give you' to agree with plural 'products'. The phrase 'VE very quality products' is unclear and corrected to 'very high quality products'. The sentence ending 'and uh very' is incomplete and replaced with 'and more' for clarity.