购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần rõ ràng hơn trong cấu trúc câu mở đầu (topic sentence), tránh lặp từ và âm thanh không cần thiết (uh, umm). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về loại quần áo bạn thích hoặc nơi bạn thường mua để câu trả lời tự nhiên và cụ thể hơn. Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. When I was a child I often went grocery shopping with my mother, but now I mainly shop for clothes such as casual shirts and jeans. I usually buy them at local markets or online because they offer a greater variety and better prices.

建議: Câu trả lời đúng hướng nhưng bị lặp ý và tiếng lắp (uh). Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý, và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về cách bạn so sánh giá (ví dụ: kiểm tra online hoặc so sánh nhãn hiệu). Tránh câu quá dài; chia thành 2–3 câu ngắn gọn.

範例: Yes, I always compare prices before I buy something. I usually check online stores and local shops to find the best deal, and I choose the cheaper option if the quality is similar. This helps me stick to my monthly budget.

建議: Trình bày ý chính rõ ràng rồi giải thích cụ thể; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thời, động từ số ít/ nhiều) và dùng từ chính xác (manufacturer không phù hợp ở chỗ này — nên là brand). Nên dùng liên từ để liệt kê lý do và một ví dụ ngắn gọn, tối đa 4 câu.

範例: Yes, I often find it hard to decide and sometimes spend an hour choosing. For example, when I shop for clothes I struggle to pick the right color, size and material, and I also compare different brands. These choices make the decision process longer.

建議: Cần dùng giọng trang trọng hơn (tránh 'Nah') và sửa ngữ pháp (số nhiều/ít, word order). Nên đưa lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ cụ thể chứng minh quan điểm (ví dụ: sản phẩm thời trang hay điện tử). Giữ câu trả lời ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng.

範例: No, I don't think expensive items are always better. Sometimes pricey products are poorly made because companies focus on profit rather than quality; for example, some designer clothes wear out faster than cheaper, well-made garments.

× I'm really keen on shopping. Where I was a child, my mom always asked me to go shopping for food, for grocery, uh, but when when I grow up, I tend to go shopping for clothes, umm.

✓ I'm really keen on shopping. When I was a child, my mom always asked me to go shopping for food and groceries, but as I grew up, I tended to go shopping for clothes.

The sentence contains errors with word order and present/past tense consistency. 'Where I was a child' should be 'When I was a child' (incorrect conjunction/time word). 'For grocery' should be 'for groceries' (count noun and plural). 'When when I grow up' mixes present with past; use past 'as I grew up' to match 'was' and 'asked'. Also 'I tend to' should be 'I tended to' to keep past perspective. Improve by maintaining consistent time frame and correct word choice; replace 'where' with 'when', 'grocery' with 'groceries', and adjust tense to past for childhood events.

× Of course, yes, I think not only me, but also everyone tend to choose which price is more reasonable uh, the lower price, but with the same quality will be uh financial and uh, it will have to tie your budget, save your budget.

✓ Of course. I think not only I, but also everyone tends to choose the more reasonable price. A lower price with the same quality will be economical and help you stick to your budget.

Errors: 'not only me' should be 'not only I' (correct pronoun in subject position). 'Everyone tend' is subject-verb agreement; 'everyone' is singular and requires 'tends'. 'Which price is more reasonable' is awkward; use 'the more reasonable price'. 'Financial' used as adjective is inappropriate; 'economical' or 'cost-effective' fits. 'It will have to tie your budget' is ungrammatical; use 'help you stick to your budget'. Keep subject-verb agreement and choose correct pronouns and adjectives.

× I would say yes, it take me hour to make decision while going shopping.

✓ I would say yes; it takes me an hour to make a decision while shopping.

Errors: 'it take' should be 'it takes' for third-person singular. 'hour' needs an article 'an hour'. 'Make decision' requires article 'a decision'. 'While going shopping' is wordy; 'while shopping' is more natural. Fix subject-verb agreement and include necessary articles.

× For example, while I go shopping for clothes, there are manufacture related that I need that make me feel confused to choose the color, the size, the material or even the manufacturer.

✓ For example, when I go shopping for clothes, there are manufacturing details I need that make me confused when choosing the color, the size, the material, or even the brand.

Problems: 'while I go' should be 'when I go' for habitual actions. 'Manufacture related' is incorrect; use 'manufacturing details' or 'manufacturer-related issues'. 'Make me feel confused to choose' is ungrammatical; use 'make me confused when choosing' or 'make it difficult for me to choose'. 'Manufacturer' likely means 'brand' here. Improve preposition and noun phrase choices and use correct gerund/preposition combinations.

× Nah, I don't think so. There are a lot of product with higher prices, but it's lower quality than the cheaper one.

✓ Nah, I don't think so. There are a lot of products with higher prices, but they are lower quality than the cheaper ones.

Errors: 'a lot of product' needs plural 'products'. 'It's lower quality' uses singular pronoun 'it' but refers to plural 'products'; use 'they are'. 'The cheaper one' should be 'the cheaper ones' to match plural. Maintain correct number agreement between nouns and pronouns.

× I think they are one reason that nowadays some manufacture then to choose the lucrative goal, uh, instead of umm, customer, uh, especially.

✓ I think one reason is that nowadays some manufacturers choose profit over customers.

Problems: 'they are one reason' is awkward; better 'one reason is that...'. 'Manufacture' should be plural noun 'manufacturers'. 'Then to choose' is incorrect; use 'choose'. 'Lucrative goal' is wordy; 'profit' or 'financial gain' is concise. 'Instead of customer' should be 'over customers' or 'rather than customers'. Reorder sentence for clarity and correct verb forms.